Monday, March 16, 2009

Rough Draft

Driving down a lonely unpaved road by only the dim lights of the car and the full moon may sound ordinary but on December 2, 2008 this drive was far from ordinary for three local high school students. Meagan Moore, her brother Jake Moore, and their friend Sam Farnum were traveling home from a late night Student Council meeting on the dark back roads in between the small towns of Ranchester and Dayton.

Keeping the ride interesting as always Farnum decided to tell a spooky story. Meagan Moore retold the story during the interview saying that Farnum told about a cult that lived on the outskirts of Ranchester near the area where they were traveling that night. This cult lived there in the late 1970’s wearing shapeless clothing and sporting short hair cuts. During the time of the cult two people disappeared on a night of a full moon around the beginning of December. These people were supposedly killed and by the cult the night the two victims vanished.

Being told this story Meagan thought that Sam was trying to scare them but she did not know what was about to come. Driving home in her stick shift red Cabriolet Volts Wagon Meagan decided that it was her turn to do the scaring. With Sam riding shot gun and her brother in the back seat she decided to speed up. Traveling fast on the dark windy road Meagan put her car into the highest gear.

Meagan being a Ranchester resident she knew the road well. She decided to fake like her car was dieing right around the area where the two people were abducted that night by the cult. Around there the road goes up a steep hill so she knew exactly what to do.

Keeping her car in a high gear she went up the hill. This made her car go slower and slower the higher and higher she went up the hill. Getting to the top she said to Sam that the car was dieing and she didn’t know what to do. As soon as she said this Sam’s face went white as if he just saw a ghost.

Behind Meagan on the side of the road stood two people dressed in all white standing with their backs to the road. Having passed all the houses and nearest roads Meagan let out a loud scream. The car was now about to die and was chugging along. Only being lit up by the moonlight the two white figures were hard to see.

Then suddenly one of the people slowly turned around and stared at Meagan, Sam, and Jake. He took a step forward while still staying in the shadows no one in the car could make out the figures face. Being in a panic Meagan slammed the clutch down and shifted into a low gear just before the car died and sped up the hill.

They all were scared and didn’t know what to do next. Having been told Sam’s story only minutes before this happened they were led to believe that these two figures were the ghosts of those two people who were supposedly murdered by the cult that night.

Speeding home with the ride quite Meagan, Sam, and Jake were not only told a story about the cult and their vicious murders but could have possibly saw the outcome of this by seeing the ghosts.

2 comments:

  1. I couldn't really see the pyramid in this paper. This sentence didn't really make sense to me "These people were supposedly killed and by the cult the night the two victims vanished." The last paragraph kinda confused me. Why did they take the back roads insted of taking the highway? Switch Cabriolet around with Volts Wagon.

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  2. Interesting story, and commas are your friend! I agree with Cole, the pyramid organization wasn't really there, it was more like a narrative. Also, quotes. Try to remember exactly what Meagan said and put it into the article. Watch your grammar a bit more.

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